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Some people believe that educating children altogether will benefit them. Others think intelligent children should be taught separately and given speacial courses. Discuss those views.

#people #children #benefit #courses
The line graph
decribes
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describes
 the proportion of tourists visiting especially in Caribbean
island
 with two types of
visitor
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 from 2010 to 2017. It is obvious that
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 and
visitors
 staying on
island
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 were increased minimally.
Moreover
, the total of these numbers
were
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 rose dramatically. We can see that
in
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 the beginning of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 were rise slight 0.25 to 0.5 during 2010 to 2011 from , meanwhile, the number
visitors
 staying on
island
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 were remained steady. After that, between 2011 and 2013 the number of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 were fluctuated,whereas,
visitors
 staying on
island
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 were doubled from 0.75 to 1.5. and a disparity between both kinds of tourists during 1 year after 2012 were 1 million. the proportion of
Visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 from 2013 to 2016
were
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 climbed up steadily and hit
the
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 peak at 2
millions
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 in 2017,while, the contribution of
visitors
 staying on
island
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were
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 remained stable at 1.5 until 2015 and There were declined slightly;
however
, eventually it was back to 1.5
millions
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