You have recently bought a Telephone with answer machine from an online shop. But after taking it home you find out that only the most recent call is kept in the calls list.

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter to express my concern regarding the Telephone I have purchased from your online store

last

week, with order number ABC321456. After I brought the item and made several calls, I realized that only the

first

call is recorded in the call history. Even though the

web site

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mentioned it can keep the call history till seven days, as I checked in the manual it has clearly mentioned that it stores only the recent call. I have purchased

this

to facilitate my

newly

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opening business

week, but now it does not eligible for the intended purpose of

to track

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missed calls from the customers of

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the previous

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week. Because of that, I would like to have

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exchange for

this

item with another, which serves my requirement.

Nevertheless

, I would be grateful if you can deliver the item before

this

Saturday

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since I am planning to

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opening

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ceremony

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of the shop on Monday morning. Yours sincerely,

Susitha

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Susitna

Bandara

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You have recently bought a Telephone with answer machine from an online shop. But after taking it home you find out that only the most recent call is kept in the calls list.

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