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In order to solve traffic problem, government should tax private car owners heavily and use that money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Nowadays, due to the fact that the population saw a significant increase all around the world , there is a growing concern for the government related to manage public transport and so they addressed
this
 issue by paying a tax and raising money to improve the means of transportation. In
this
 essay , I will mention the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 law and my opinion is
also
 included . One of the main advantages of
this
 law is that
people
 would be more restricted to bringing their private Car to the city and using them as a means of commuting to work .
As a result
,a decrease in private cars in the city is a reduction in the level of pollution .
Moreover
, another benefit of
this
 restriction is that every individual can be more encouraged to
use
 public transport systems , until the government service the taxes to improve the infrastructure and provide
people
 with better services and promote a clean environment in the subways , the public may
use
 an alternative method and ignore using
this
 means of transportation. Turning to the other side of the argument , one of the main disadvantages of
this
 solution is that ,
although
 by getting a huge amount of money from
people
 and invest in transportation system
people
 persuade
use
 metro or bus .
However
, it may not be a convenient and suitable way for everyone especially for families with children . What I mean by
that is
 the child may scream or disturb others comfort zone . All in
all
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 in my point of view , Government should raise public awareness about the infrastructure of the city and educate crowd to
use
 their private car when it is necessary
instead
 of bringing in some rigid law and take tax from society to restrict
this
 issue .  In conclusion, It cannot deny the fact that
this
 order in long term can be uncomfortable for some families but the advantages may outweigh the disadvantages.
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