It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that

children

are mainly influenced by media, pop culture and their friends

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; whereas, it is considered by the others that the role of

family

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is significantly vital in the

development

of

children

. These arguments are supported equally before drawing a reasoned conclusion in

this

essay. On the one hand, it is completely true that the role played by the surrounding environment of

children

is imperative.

For example

, they watch

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and international current affairs of society on different platforms of media, and

this

is the way they learn music, culture and other things related to the community and the world.

Moreover

, when

children

meet their friends on play dates and

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parties, they get to know about the importance of socializing with others. The influence of outsiders aid

children

to develop socially.

Hence

, the importance of outside ambience on the

development

of a child can never be denied.

On the other hand

,

children

start their intellectual and physical

development

at home where family plays a crucial role.

For instance

,

children

learn

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,

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and

playing

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from their family members. Siblings often help each

others

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in their studies. Parents teach their

children

etiquettes

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and ethics, these manners are indispensable for them to

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flourish

in society.

Thus

,

this

makes it clear that family is essential for a child's

development

. In conclusion, both sides of the argument - considering the prospect of main factors affecting the

development

of

children

- have strong support. It is,

therefore

, agreed that family

as well as friends, media and pop culture all

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have

an

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equal and significant importance in the

development

of

children

.