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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary school. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is an opinion among some experts that for
children
 it is better to learn a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 than at secondary.
This
 essay will suggest
that
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the advantage of learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
. The
first
 person is why it is better is keep timing. The early
children
 begin to learn another
language
 the better. By middle class, the person will know, at least basic on another
language
. With
this
 temp, by the end of
school
, the person does not need additional courses. I know
this
of
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 my own example. I did not learn English at my primary
school
, so I gave many additional English courses for
my
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 whole rest life.
Furthermore
, the foreign
language
,
for instance
, English will help students in a higher class to take more knowledge and get acquainted with articles, which did not translate to their native
language
.
Secondly
, there is a claim that at an early age
children
 learn and remember better than elders, the brain works faster. It is seen how
children
 learn other things and develop wonderful faster.
Moreover
, while they a
child
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, they have more time for study, because with measure they grow, they will appear more hobbies and
favorite
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 subjects and they do no time left to study another
language
. It is possible that it not will be interesting for them. In conclusion, the factors,
such
 as work of the brain, a lot of time are obvious advantages, than disadvantages.
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