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Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for slowing this problem

#children #lifestyle #schools #parents
Nowadays
considerable
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 amount of
children
has
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unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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life
 way.
Education
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 system and parents have to make attempt to solve
this
 problem. Childhood is the most important
life
 period which we must try to enlarge some fruitful habits. There is no doubt that one of them is
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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. Over
time
,
children
's
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 has been literally changed.
In particular
, parents because
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they do not have enough
time
they
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don't care about it.
Hence
,
children
 and teenagers waste plenty of
time
for
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unusual
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an unusual
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job
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jobs
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such
 as playing
digital
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the digital
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game
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games
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 and
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 on
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a chair
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chair
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.
Additionally
, they gain a lot of calories without
practicing
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 actively.
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of
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 fact, over
this
 decade
children
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,children
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 have been wasting plenty of their own
time
 on social
network
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networks
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 and they have done less exercise
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than
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that
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than
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 what they did over
past
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 twenty years.
Moreover
, not only
children
 have been becoming
more fatty
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fattier
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 but
also
 some
disease
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diseases
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 related to overweight have expanded among them.
Furthermore
, in
past
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the past
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children
 used to eat homemade
food
 more than they do now.
Thus
, they gain
less
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 celeries and more fruitful
nutrient
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nutrients
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 which cause
they
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them
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was
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 healthy. Another factor affecting
on
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children
life style
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lifestyle
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 is consuming junk
food
 with
tras
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trans
- oil. Particularly, junk
food
 is
completely
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 impact on hearth's performance. A great deal of importance is educating to use less high calories
food
 for
children
 could reduce
consuming
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 of them especially if it does with teachers.
For example
, teaching about healthy
food
 like fruit or
whole grain
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 bread and homemade
food
 could encourage
children
 to use them more. In conclusion, if
these
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manner
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 continued
children
 would become more unhealthy.
Hence
, teachers and parents have to help each other to tackle completely
this
 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy lifestyle
  • growing concern
  • crucial role
  • addressing this issue
  • promote healthy habits
  • educational programs
  • physical activities
  • establish healthy routines
  • nutritious meals
  • collaboration
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