Nowadays young people are admiring media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

In
this
era of technology, social media platforms have spread their wings all over the globe. With the usage of these
platforms
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our youngsters have initiated idolising public figures and celebrities , even if
such
personalities
themselves take the wrong path. From my perspective looking up to famous figures is quite advantageous as teenagers can learn to follow their dreams without being afraid
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downfalls and adopt
healthy
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regime. To embark with, it goes without saying that today, youth follows entertainment
personalities
Inadvertently which creates a feeling among them that
one
neds
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to be industrious, diligent and determined to achieve the goal which seems
imposible
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impossible
at glance. Since these stars were
also
common people from
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background
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they had spark and zeal in their hearts to go walk on untrodden paths and
hence
achieved the pinnacle of success. By stalking them on social accounts, teenagers have got to know their struggle, past
life
,how they become prosperous and even the negative side of
life
such
as smoking , drinking and drugging . An
epitomization
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itemization
of
this
could be , Sanday Dutt, a famous
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actor, who was accused of possessing
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56 rifle and
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cartridges illegally, his biography became was on the top of
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movies in
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history.
Besides
this
, it is pertinent to mention here that youth today follows
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sedentary
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lifestyle owing to
never ending
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work commitments and demanding job. On contrary,
such
idols generally disperse the message to lead
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way of living, eat nutrition as well as indulge in active pursuits. With the inevitable recommendations and suggestions from them, adolescents tend to get an insight that they should get rid of inactive pursuits and pre-packed food items.
Therefore
, if
one
filters the downside of famous
celebritie's
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celebrities
personalities
, certainly there are innumerable valuable
life
lessons which can be learnt. Sachin Tendulkar , knowns as
god
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of cricket, during his interviews always emphasises the significance of
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physique and nutritious diet
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epitome of it. To conclude, despite the negative behavioural aspects of renowned
personalities
, not only
one
gets
detrimination
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determination
and enthusiasm to follow their passion, but
also
get precious
life
lessons that
one
cannot learn without facing failure themselves.
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