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in their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this ? do you think it is a positive or negative development ?

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It is argued that currently advertisements of businesses are made with really different attitudes that companies want to show people their
products
 that they are new with some kinds of features in the market.
This
 essay will discuss the purpose of these actions and show
beneficial
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the beneficial
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 and negative
sides
 of them.
To begin
 with,
actually
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 businesses have started emphasizing their items in a way that they are brand-new things in the markets due to some reasons.
For example
: introducing
with
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apply
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such
kind
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 of strategy
first
 fully help them to increase their number of sales. Because it is
incredibly
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an incredibly
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 good type of method to make huge interest in
a
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public and motivate them to purchase.
Secondly
, making adverts in these ways
also
 will be extremely helpful to companies to show huge growth with their brand awareness. Because big amounts of people have strong desires to try new
products
.
On the other hand
, following
this
 strategy have it is negative
sides
 as well. These negatives can come from the quality of particular
products
 and lying
with
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 telling new features and these actions may cause big problems. Because if community buy and observe these types of
products
 and if they know that they have not got the difference with other firms,
on the contrary
, it causes to
loss
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 one of the most essential
thing
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things
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 is belief to brand. To sum up, introducing items in
such
 kinds of ways have their main objectives and advantageous, disadvantageous
sides
 as mentioned. So, if
products
 have their real new features it will be really good to advertise with their new
sides
 but despite having these kinds of things it will lead firms to
being
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 loss their beliefs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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