Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for a child having a larger number of toys?

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There have been many discussions revolving around the issue of whether parents buying a lot of playthings for
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is good or not. In
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essay, I will explain why playthings are vital, compared with their disadvantages. Having plaything is fun always for infants.
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, Playthings promotes
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to watch cartoons; It
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helps them to learn a new language quickly.
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, many kindergartens included toy-based cartoons as a part of their learning to promote education. To add to it, A survey was conducted by the University of Melbourne found 70 % of kids benefited from cartoons and the rest 30 % failed to respond.
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it becomes clear that buying plaything somehow promotes
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's behaviour.
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, Too many toys would distract
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to study.
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, most of the
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doesn't know the importance of studies at a young age; if they didn't study,
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of it they become dropouts early. To bolster, A survey was conducted by the University of Sydney found that 40 % of kids become dropouts during young age and the rest 60 % loses their interest in studies during their young age. It becomes apparent parents should not buy more toys during the infant stage as well as adulthood. Having considering both the views buying toys have an upper hand over being a strict parent.
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, I would suggest parents should buy more dolls during childhood which I believe is soundly based on the above reasoning I have presented above.
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