More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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developed modern life, there are
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pros and cons.
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just that if pros outweigh the cons, people started to accept it
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example, cars. Despite
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knowing all the disadvantages of
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cars humans still choose
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because it is more
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and convenient. The same goes on why more people decided to have
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later age than in the past. There are many reasons for
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and the main reason is the expenses of having a child before and after birth. In
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only man needed to work
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to feed the whole family of 6 but in present despite
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wife and
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working, it might be enough to feed 2
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but won't be able to cover their expenses
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as school fees, tuitions fees, lunch fees, pocket money,
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, so on.
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, pregnant women can be found working more often than
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used to. More chances to harm
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the mother and the baby. Even if there is no finical problem ,
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say one is physically prepared
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come the
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one, mentally prepared to have
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. Having
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children
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is not as easy as
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used to tell.
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the
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, especially the mother will have to sleep less since the baby is in the womb to till he/she come to
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age of 5. During those
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both
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have to be prepared not just physically but mentally too. Giving birth is
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a beautiful thing , at the same
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it is as dangerous and as difficult as it can be.
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, managing
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would be very challenging as
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the
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will be working.
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, If the
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leave for work
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who gonna watch their kids? Perhaps a nanny but
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their grandparents but they are too old and too far.
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, taking
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for a better future is worth it. The only disadvantage would be the age gap between the child and the
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but it can
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taken in
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way as
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more
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kid and share a stronger bond. So the advantages surely outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delaying parenthood
  • financial stability
  • career advancement
  • personal goals
  • higher education
  • fertility treatments
  • relationship stability
  • health care improvements
  • personal development
  • postponing children
  • achieve milestones
  • family planning
  • modern society
  • life expectancy
  • paternal and maternal age
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