Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

For the development of a nation, governments have to improve and expand the businesses that will help to increase the economy of the country and

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to compete with other advanced countries. But,

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advancement somewhere affects the local societies and businesses rapidly,

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local culture of every region is

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very soon. I partially agree with

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argument and in

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essay, I will discuss the reasons why development is important and what should we do to build a good relationship between small businesses and local communities. There is no doubt that

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the larger buildings in every city of their nation, to earn more taxes from their country folks, by borrowing the shops to them for selling the products or services.

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is possible because of advancements in technology, which helps to expand the small markets into supermarkets, where all are items available that are somewhat not available

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the local markets.

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,

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expansion assists the customers

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in buying

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things and

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paying

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the bill

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self-checkout

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of searching for staff.

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to

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, the advancements in supermarkets provide job opportunities to many youths in the front section

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the back section,like, the warehouse.

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, there are some drawbacks to supermarket expansion.

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main and most effective is

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down the business of small owners who earn some money from their daily selling and

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the

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of their family members.

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, the bond between the local

cultural

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culture

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and local business going to

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every day, because

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consumers prefer to buy things from big malls rather than visiting the small shops which are nearby their hometown.

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, in the past time, everybody likes to buy products from their town market, because of the quality of the item and

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ease

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to buy

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of buying

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without wasting time

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apply

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travelling to city malls. But, now consumers are always ready to go out and go shopping in big malls. In conclusion, I think it is the responsibility of everyone and governments to always keep a good bond within the local societies because the future generation will learn from our present. So, if the present discloses the traditional culture

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the poor person will not feed their family.