Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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at home rather than going
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study is an old method. In
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modern
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to attend college or university but they can conduct their online
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according to their schedules.
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peers . In
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communication is crucial for the students . Due to
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they enhance more knowledge and will become a good leader and speaker in the future .
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their career opportunities. In conclusion,
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reckon online studying is beneficial for the citizens. In regards , I believe that students should be taught at university and other academic institutions, as nowadays , distance learning cannot replace the old methods.
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