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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#people #distance #program #study #home #benefit #college #universities
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people
 prefer
study
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 at home rather than going
college
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 or
universities
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. I firmly agree with
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 view that
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 conversation is essential. To explain , it is true that
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 study is an old method. In
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 modern
people
 are keen to replace it with internet resources.
Furthermore
, online learning is comfortable, as they will get knowledge .
For instance
 , many
people
 have duties at home so they
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 to attend college or university but they can conduct their online
class
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classes
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 according to their schedules.
On the other hand
 , it is clear that online education cannot replace the old method of teaching .
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 changes can
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 influence
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their interpersonal skills ,
such
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peers . In
this
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 communication is crucial for the students . Due to
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 they enhance more knowledge and will become a good leader and speaker in the future .
For instance
,
people
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people
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confidence,due to which
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their career opportunities. In conclusion,
although
 many
people
 reckon online studying is beneficial for the citizens. In regards , I believe that students should be taught at university and other academic institutions, as nowadays , distance learning cannot replace the old methods.
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