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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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is commonly believe
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the
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people
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 prefer
study
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 at home rather than going
college
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 or
universities
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university
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. I firmly agree with
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 conversation is essential. To explain , it is true that
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 study is an old method. In
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 modern
people
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 are keen to replace it with internet resources.
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, online learning is comfortable, as they will get knowledge .
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people
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 have duties at home so they
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 to attend college or university but they can conduct their online
class
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classes
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 according to their schedules.
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 , it is clear that online education cannot replace the old method of teaching .
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 influence
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their interpersonal skills ,
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 as communication and cooperation with
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peers . In
this
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 regards
face
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 to
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 communication is crucial for the students . Due to
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 they enhance more knowledge and will become a good leader and speaker in the future .
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,
people
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 who cannot communicate with other
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 ,
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will turn to lack
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confidence,due to which
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can damage
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their career opportunities. In conclusion,
although
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 many
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 reckon online studying is beneficial for the citizens. In regards , I believe that students should be taught at university and other academic institutions, as nowadays , distance learning cannot replace the old methods.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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