Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. Discuss some of the effects of a high population density and suggest some ways on which this trend could be reversed. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Nearly all major
cities
tend to grow at
remarkable
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rate due to rapidly growing rocketing numbers in
population
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the population
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. Major countries suffer from high
population
density, because
large
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proportion of
population
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the population
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chasing high ambitions, and suffer from disparity of services and facilities in country and city. High
population
density effect
on
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major
cities
. Significantly, but unfortunately not
in
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positive
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the positive
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side. It might lead to a high
population
level and
vetinetly
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patiently
will increase the crime rate,
hence
people would be forced to live in low
life
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conditions.
Moreover
relentless
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number of employees would not be recruited, because of
high
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the high
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level of
competetiveness
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competitiveness
. To resolve the issue of overcrowded
cities
,
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government
governent
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should ensure
population
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the population
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of rural areas, with all vital facilities.
For instance
, cope with the issue of unemployment.
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I suggest to
forbide
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forbid
forbids
moving to
a major
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major cities
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cities
. Without probable reason or exact goal. Taking All into consideration, the issue of uncontrolled growth of
cities
also
goves
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gives
rise to
a
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social problems
such
as high unemployment, crime and in less affluent countries, the creation of slums, to reverse
this
trend,
intervention
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the intervention
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of government is necessary.
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