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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Indubitably, advancement in technology changes
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human life. It is often argued that online education or web
devices
 replaced
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books
 while many folks
now a days
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 like to study through tabs
instead
 of paper materials.
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 , it is
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 as well as
destructive
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 trend. I Agreed that learning through phones is much easier as
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 to
books
 whether it has some negative impacts on
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 generation. Apparently,
internet
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 holds
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 range of constructive benefits.
To begin
 with, students can easily learn through
devices
 and gain
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 knowledge .
For example
- in overseas everyone
studied
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 on
computer
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 where the students can easily access all online
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 materials and they
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don't
 need to bring or purchase
books
 of different subjects.
Secondly
, with the help of
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 less burden on children to carry heavy bags to schools as everything is
avaialble
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available
 only in one tab.
Moreover
, they
dont
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don't
 need to pay
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tuition
 fees as well
like
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 different types of applications available so we can easily get ideas.
For example
- in
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 tutorial application. It has tremendous benefits in toddler
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 they can learn rhymes by watching videos
instead
 of
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poem
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.
On the other hand
 , it has myriad detrimental effects. Chiefly, due to the
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 folks
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loose
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 their interest as they search other sites and spend time on video games .
Additionally
, it
also
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 children eye health because if they sit all the time on
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 it is harmful
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 their eyesight.
Besides
,
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 decreases the reading abilities of
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toddler
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 as they will
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 interest to read
books
 and totally depend upon technology. To recapitulate, technological
devices
 are good in some instances if we use
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 in a proper manner while
on the other hand
 if little changes
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 in
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 materials
then
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 in toddlers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Portability
  • Accessibility
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Environmental conservation
  • Tactile experience
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Digital fatigue
  • Prolonged screen time
  • Technical issues
  • Independent bookstores
  • Piracy issues
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