Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Environmental problem is a catch-up term that refers to any environment-involved changes most of which are negative. As
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industrialization
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, much attention has been paid
on
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these problems as some people suggest that the main one is the loss of
species
in
current
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time while others
opposed
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for
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the more significant problems. From my perspective,
however
, it is hard to decide which
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ones
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are the most important. Some plants
such
as oak
tree
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trees
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and grass serve as a natural shelter for other animals which prevent them from low temperature and flood. The loss of some particular
species
of plants makes lots of
animal
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animals
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nowhere to go
thus
die from these devastating environmental conditions, causing
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more severe decline in biological diversity.
Besides
, some
species
such
as
worm
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worms
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have a function to decompose poisonous organic
compound
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compounds
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and gas in nature. It is obvious that
disappearance
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of these
species
can make poisonous substance exists for more time, greatly harming people’s health once inhaled. Meanwhile, it is admitted that there are other environmental issues that can’t be ignored.
For instance
,
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global warming,
which
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is caused by
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emission of carbon dioxide. A direct negative result it brings is that people feel more scorching even in the living place.
Furthermore
, accelerated melting speed of iceberg in poles is expected with higher temperature, raising the level of
sea
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the sea
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and the land is
consequently
submerged. Because of it, human’s living space is diminishing at an alarming rate. As analyzed above we can conclude that every
environment
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problem should be taken into consideration for its potential destructive consequence. In order to protect the environment, the government is supposed to take viable and feasible actions
such
as advocating an environment-friendly lifestyle. And what we can do as a beginning to follow the policy made by
government
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the government
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is to take commune transportation
instead
of private cars.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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