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People buy good products that work, therefore, advertising is unnecessary and is no more than a form of entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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We are living in a modern era,so the advancement of technology
enable
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 ample amenities for people in the form of
advertisements
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,
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 these days,many individuals tend to purchase products according to the announcement given by the particular item of a landlord,but others say that it is unessential to follow a notice because people have an ability to choose which
product
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 is the best.I completely disaccord with
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 statement. To embark on,there are ample benefits of using
advertisements
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.
firstly
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,we do not want to struggle which
product
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 is the best to buy.
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,
advertisements
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 will compensate the right directions to people like how to use products and how the outcomes will come without errors,so nowadays many youngsters tend to purchase electronic gadgets by seeing the
advertisements
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 just sit at a home without struggling.
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,when I was young,there were no
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 facilities,so my parents used to go outside to take products,but they did not know which
product
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 is the best,
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 they just bought items which were kept on the shelves,
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,they lost their items within a few days. On another hand,some individuals feel that
advertisement
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advertisements
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 can be distributed while watching movies and shows.
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,most of the announcements are fake because they want to earn money by giving
a positive announcements
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positive announcements
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.
furthermore
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,
cost
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the cost
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 is very high because they add an extra charge for production as well as sometimes announcements will confuse the buyers.
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,
advertisements
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are support
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 each and every
product
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,so customers can be get confused about the quality of
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product
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the product
a product
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. To conclude,
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advertisements
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 play a crucial role in the world,
but
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 everyone should be very
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careful
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carful
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careful
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 while choosing the
product
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.

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