In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

The globalised society, where we are living
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, has to face a huge issue involving the double vision that has been developed by the population regards to the current railway
system
’s situation. If half of the people
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to build
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a new more efficient
system
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of
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states that the existing lines should be improved. I personally believe that the creation of novel transportation lines could be the only acceptable solution in order to improve the overall condition of the entire
system
.
To begin
with, an improvement of the existing lines could be essential to save all the material used in the previous stage of the construction.
Additionally
, the simple renovation will not require to spend a long period of time because the basic structure already exists and
this
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can use the provided service as well.
On the other hand
, the construction of a new railway
system
has to be considered as a
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valuable
source to lessen the time. A fast railway
system
can be seen as a substitution
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plane and a huge amount of people can take advantage of it.
Furthermore
, if environmental factors are taken into consideration, the emissions of
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fossil
fuels into the atmosphere will decrease considerably. To conclude, even though there is still a controversial debate about
this
point, I strongly believe that the majority of the countries need a real reconstruction
instead
of a simple renovation. Taking all these observations into account, a better facility has to be built from the starting point and not just replaced with
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innovative planning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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