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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible.others believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #information
The current globalisation has led our world to have free access to almost every source of knowledge. Analysing all data, it has emerged how a part of the global population argues to increase the amount of available
information
, compared to the other half that doesn't agree with the previous one about sharing data. Taking
this
 point into account, I’m strictly convinced that in order to reach the right balance, we have to think carefully before sharing any
information
. Looking from an overall perspective, spreading
information
 can be precious and essential because it is considered to be a real way by which the entire population can acquire more knowledge and increase their level of cognitive abilities about several topics.
For instance
, having constant feedback about the environmental situation can allow people to control their behaviour and act in order to reduce the emission of greenhouse gases.
On the contrary
, the idea of sharing
information
 and sensible data has been seen as a real threat by the other large proportion of human beings because
this
 decision can affect their life drastically. According to a huge variety of recorded opinions, people are truly afraid to spread their current location or to show their children’s face throughout
the
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social media
such
 as Facebook or Instagram. As consequence, if people had not shared their location, robbers could not have known
the
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 real position
of
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them and
this
 is just one of some possible precautions that
has
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 been suggested in order to minimise negative events
such
 as burglary or forgery. All things considered, I strongly believe that sharing a huge amount of
information
 can be dangerous for the global society and for our lives. Taking into account all the possible threats, everybody should be aware of the most common risks of sharing
information
.
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