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Mobile phone usage is held responsible for a lot of medical, social and technical problems. What forms do these problems take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the advantages offered by mobile phones? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Using a mobile phone has become a hot topic nowadays.Cell phones are being used in every nook and corner of the world.With their
bernefits
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benefits
 ,we are
also
 facing various problems due to their excessive use.Adults and teenagers are not able to focus on their work and studies as they spent long hours on social media and entertainment.
This
 problem has led to medical issues with humans which causes
deteriotation
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deterioration
 in their health and mental wellness. I have seen so many kids and teenagers are stuck to their phones without any reason.they are forgetting about the
priorties
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priorities
 of life.They do not want to involve themselves in any activity and does not like to meet with any relatives.
This
 issue has led to irritation and loss of health in kids and adults.
Although
, the youth of today has become
more
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smarter and
knowlegeble
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knowledgeable
 with use of mobile but in my opinion phones have more disadvantages than advantages.
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