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Many famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #media #privacy
Numerous
celebraties
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celebrities
 in our society are there who are the role models for the
people
. Some of them are treated in
bad
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a bad
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 manner by the
media
 by trolling them. We should consider them as
also
 normal
people
 without judging them. In
this
essay
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 I will be discussing
about
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merits and demerits and will conclude by my opinion that every
people
 should be treated
equaly
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equally
 whether they are famous or common
people
.
Firstly
, there are many sectors like music, film, politics, art in which the
people
 are well known
by
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for
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there
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their
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 works. It
need
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needs
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 immense hard work and dedication to
acheive
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achieve
 success and be famous.
Moreover
,
the
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famous
person
are
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is
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also
 normal
people
 who have kids and family at home. Trolling
person
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a person
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 badly in
media
 could be emotionally and economically determintal. To make an image
it
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takes time but to break
someones
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someone's
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 image could take seconds.
Secondly
,
media
 should be responsible for
ther
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their
the
contents
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content
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 they show on Television.
People
 across the globe are connected with the news and politics. Showing the wrong image could
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the life of audiences as well as the
celebraties
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celebrities
. Many young and old
people
 are emotionally connected with
there
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their
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 role models.
However
, sometimes famous
people
 could
also
 mislead us by showing their perfect personality in
media
 but being something else in real life.
Media
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The media
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 can show us
correct
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the correct
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 picture of a
person
.
Furthermore
, Some
celebraties
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celebrities
 think highly of themselves and have attitudes for others which is not
accetable
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acceptable
. To conclude, there
are
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is
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 some
person
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people
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 who
are
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is
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 treated badly by the
media
 which should not be done.
However
,
instead
 of showing them
bad
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badly
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 they should be given some time to realise
there
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their
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 fault and should be judged like normal
people
.
There
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Their
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 family life should be kept apart and
media
 should act more professionally by showing vital content only.
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