Many famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Numerous
celebraties
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celebrities
in our society are there who are the role models for the
people
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. Some of them are treated in
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manner by the
media
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by trolling them. We should consider them as
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normal
people
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without judging them. In
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I will be discussing
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merits and demerits and will conclude by my opinion that every
people
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should be treated
equaly
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equally
whether they are famous or common
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.
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, there are many sectors like music, film, politics, art in which the
people
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are well known
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there
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works. It
need
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immense hard work and dedication to
acheive
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achieve
success and be famous.
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,
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famous
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are
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also
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normal
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who have kids and family at home. Trolling
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person
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badly in
media
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could be emotionally and economically determintal. To make an image
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takes time but to break
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image could take seconds.
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,
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should be responsible for
ther
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their
the
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they show on Television.
People
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across the globe are connected with the news and politics. Showing the wrong image could
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effect
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affect
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the life of audiences as well as the
celebraties
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celebrities
. Many young and old
people
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are emotionally connected with
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their
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role models.
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, sometimes famous
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could
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mislead us by showing their perfect personality in
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but being something else in real life.
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Media
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can show us
correct
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the correct
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picture of a
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.
Furthermore
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, Some
celebraties
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celebrities
think highly of themselves and have attitudes for others which is not
accetable
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acceptable
. To conclude, there
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some
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person
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people
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who
are
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treated badly by the
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which should not be done.
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,
instead
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of showing them
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they should be given some time to realise
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fault and should be judged like normal
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.
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family life should be kept apart and
media
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should act more professionally by showing vital content only.
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