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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
During
this
 pandemic where
people
 were not allowed to go out due to the community quarantines,
people
 had no choice but to look for ways to keep themselves productive and make the most out of
this
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these
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 restrictions.One of the things that
people
 found helpful in dealing with
this
 pandemic is maintaining
ones
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one
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 best state of well being through health consciousness. examples of these are exercise,meditation,and of course,
diet
. but what really is a healthy
diet
? Others say that a healthy
diet
 is very important and others use the term
diet
 interchangeably with reducing but
diet
 is a general term for what we eat and what we consume.
For example
, if I consume only vegetable products,
then
 that would be referred to as
vegan
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a vegan
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diet
. Back in my younger days, my mother would always tell me that a healthy
diet
 should have green leafy vegetables,but she always made sure that it was balanced and so she would serve it with meat and rice to complete the go,grow, and glow foods.
People
 always incorporate health with vegetables when it comes to
diet
 but is it really enough?
On the other hand
, when our intake only consists of meat products, other
people
 view
your
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our
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 eating habits as unhealthy but
this
 really depends on what is your goal and what you want to achieve. There are
people
 whose
the
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apply
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basis for being healthy is having big bulky muscles, now we can't judge them right? because
that is
 their epitome of being in optimum state. For
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bodybuilders
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body builders
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bodybuilders
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 to get the body they wanna achieve, they need a lot of protein intake because
this
 is the one responsible for targeting the muscles.
Yes
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 they eat vegetables but seldom, they concentrate more on protein intake thru their foods and supplements.
for example
,they take protein shakes and powders which for them is healthy in their point of view. In conclusion, we need a variety of food sources in order to achieve the best state of well being because all our basic needs are not present in just a single food group. We need a diversified meal plan in order to satisfy the needs of our body as a whole. having an array of choices is always better than sticking to a single option because
this
 limits other potentials that may be more beneficial.
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