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With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smartphones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 day and age, there is a tremendously controversial perspective heating a debate whether the drawbacks of the rapidly-developing technological communication overshadow its merits. While
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 statement is valid to some extent, I would contend that it may do more good than harm. Without a shadow of a doubt,
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 trend causes a wealth of negative effects and one of them is the deterioration of human-to-human relationships. Nowadays,
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, especially the young, tend to overuse intelligent devices
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 of spending time refining their health, which leads to a bunch of harmful issues about not only their physical condition but
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 their well-being.
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, American adolescents using smartphones more than five hours per day are at risk of being overweight twice as high as others.
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, top-notch technologies bring
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 numerous advantages. While the cons of a fast-paced society are widely acknowledged, it is unfair if its pros are ignored. Human-to-human communication in different areas becomes significantly faster and more convenient. Several smart gadgets like smartphones, tablets, computers are easily connected with social media so
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 can easily make new friends, especially international ones, find like-minded
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 and contact through their own technological devices rather than person to person.
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,
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 to the harmful effects, the positive ones contribute to revamping human lives. In conclusion,
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people
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 are suffering from the advanced technological facilities' a large number of drawbacks, I believe that it has a positive impact and it has changed our lifestyle for the better.
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