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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 tend to enjoy experiencing new technologies and cultural
things
. The others prefer staying in their familiar lifestyles. In
this
 essay, I will explain both views in detail.
Firstly
, the former who prefer to experience new
things
 insist that they can learn a lot of
things
 through unfamiliar
things
.
For example
, when they go to countries where they have not visited they can have chances to learn about their culture and to eat exotic foods with spices. From these special experiences, they may adapt more rapidly to modern society, rather than individuals who did not go abroad and just adhere to their own lives.
On the other hand
,
people
 who prefer familiar activities and environments to new
things
 argue that their repeated experiences create efficiency and stability. And they say new
things
 have risks because they often cause problems which are hard to handle.
For example
, when some
people
 cook in their kitchen, they can easily treat issues
while
 cooking.
However
, if the place is not familiar, they naturally might be confused, even if they are professional chefs.
Thus
, when individuals repeat similar methods, they can have a profession and better performance.
However
, when they continuously choose only new
things
, they cannot be familiar with anything. In conclusion, both statements have beneficial factors.
People
 who like experiencing new
things
 may have opportunities to learn diverse knowledge. The others who prefer familiar
things
 may earn specialized experience and profession.
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general
Aim to provide more specific examples to illustrate your points better. This can add more depth and make your argument more persuasive.
task response
While the essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion, consider elaborating a bit more on your own perspective with stronger arguments.
coherence cohesion
Use more varied linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas. This can make your essay smoother and more engaging.
general
Your essay is clear and easy to understand, with well-organized paragraphs.
task response
You effectively discuss both attitudes and provide a clear conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively bracket the main body of the essay, giving it a solid structure.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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