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The advent of the Internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working arrangement has more advantages or disadvantages? Share personal examples in your essay.

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Technology has impacted the way of working . The discovery of the internet has made
possible
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it possible
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 for people to
work
 from their
home
instead
 of their offices. In my opinion,
this
 arrangement has more advantages than disadvantages. In the
followings
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following
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, we will show , how working at
home
 is
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a benefit
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benefit
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beneficial
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 for people or employers by giving them
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a
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lot of opportunities and
help
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helping
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 them to save
cost
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costs
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.
Firstly
, the biggest advantage is that people can
work
 flexible hours.
This
 mode is helpful for women who have young children. Many of them who quit their job after the birth of their children are now back in the job market.
Secondly
, employers
also
 benefit from
this
 arrangement. When employees
work
 from their homes, the cost of running the business comes down. Working from
home
 saves valuable resources. Less commuting means less travel.
This
 can result in significant fuel savings and cleaner air. To conclude, there are several advantages to
work
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 from
home
. Many employers have already realized
this
 and started encouraging their workers to do so . In the future, we will certainly have more organizations formalizing
this
 route
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