Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to work hard when they are young.What are the positive and negative sides of it?

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Introduction
University
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has become much of a stressful environment
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puts
students
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in an always-active condition in order to withstand all the unbearable pressures. In my point of view, I believe
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tendency brings both positives and negatives.
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On the
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positive
side, I would agree that
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tendency Brings a wide range of benefits.
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of all,
students
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might study a variety of knowledge with all fields in their life.
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,they might have experience and
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opportunities
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a
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job with the ideal foundation that they had studied at
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.
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,when they work hard in
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years,they can directly address problems arising in real life and might learn how to control themselves
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as time management,financial management and many more.
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On the negative side,pressure on the school and
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students
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for working hard is the cause of inefficient learning.with a great amount of knowledge acquired on the regular
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,
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are more likely to be tired and bored.
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,
university
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students
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are easily stressed if they cannot strike a balance between work and leisure.
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,their enthusiasm for learning will be reduced,resulting in
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poor academic performance.
Conclusion
In conclusion,despite the fact that pressuring
students
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may help them to be more ambitious,parents and teachers need to do proper counselling and guide them properly.
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,
aptitude
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the aptitude
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of the student
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to be given consideration.

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