Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In nowadays
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, more and more
people
trying to buy
things
on the internet, because it is more
convenience
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than buying
things
in
the
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physical stores, you just need to use your finger to click the
things
what
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that
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you want on the online
shops
and pay a small sum of money for delivery
then
the seller will receive the order on their online shop and send the goods to you in a short time, that means you can save the time on
traveling
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to buy
things
and you don’t have to figure out how to carry them. Some
people
may
worried
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about the goods will
lost
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lose
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or be stolen when they are in delivery.
This
may
happened
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in the early days of online shopping. But now, more and more
people
join
in
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the line of
the
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online shopping, so the protection is getting better and better.
Secondly
, about the
traveling
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part, we can book the air ticket or train ticket and even the hotel and so on,
this
has led to the rapid development of tourism, we don’t need to think about "will we not have
place
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to live during the trip." ”will we not be able to get
ticket
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a ticket
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if we plan to travel.”
This
can help
people
to plan their
trip
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trips
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in advance. These are the advantages of online shopping and the reasons why
people
like it.
However
, still got
a lots
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a lot
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of
people
can not accept purchasing online and prefer to visit
shops
personally to buy, they thought
although
it will need to spend more time on travel,
buy
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but
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they can see the real
things
and touch the real
things
in the
shops
, that allow them to make better choices and decisions. In a word, in my opinion, the
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appearance
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appear
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appeal
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of online shopping is good for purchasing, so to avoid some of the
things
that we worry about, we can buy the
things
which is expensive in the physical
shops
and other
things
that are not very expensive we can choose to buy it online.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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