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The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that everyone should be paid a basic
income
 to meet their basic needs.
However
, some may argue doing so can create some clear
problems
. There are some reasons why some believe government should pay a basic
income
 to their citizens.
Firstly
, if
people
 cannot satisfy their basic needs,
this
 leads to extreme
poverty
. Eventually,
this
 may result in
health
problems
 when they can not receive enough vitamins and nutritious foods due to
poverty
. Even in the long run,
governments
 may be obliged to devote more public expenditure to the
health
 sector to tackle
health
 risks created by
poverty
.
Moreover
, unfair distribution of wealth in
societies
 can cause some social issues. As some
people
 cannot make ends needs, while some have a lavish lifestyle. So
this
 may breed violence or even worse riots, particularly in impoverished areas when poor
people
 feel be treated with contempt.
However
, allocating resources to eradicate
poverty
 through paying basic
income
 to anyone can cause some
problems
. Some
people
 can be reluctant to work when the
governments
 satisfy their basic needs.
This
 being the case may lead to unproductive
societies
. The government can incur considerable expenses in the long run, whose GDP can decrease.
This
 can
also
 lead to
societies
 being faced with financial crises.
Therefore
, in my view,
governments
,
instead
 of paying basic
income
 to everyone, should devote their budgets to investing in impoverished areas and creating job opportunities for them. In conclusion,
poverty
 in
societies
 may create social and
health
problems
.
Governments
 should urgently consider
this
 matter, But paying basic
income
 to anyone would not be an effective solution to address
this
 problem. It is crucial for
governments
 to provide equal job opportunities for everyone, particularly for poor
people
, to eradicate extreme
poverty
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic income
  • financial security
  • unemployed
  • poverty
  • support
  • discourage
  • economic growth
  • taxes
  • budgetary strain
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