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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building the live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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An increasing number of
people
 are now interested in finding the origin and past of the residence they are currently living in.
This
 essay will argue that
main
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 causes for
this
 are curiosity and media, and the most viable solution is to do research on the internet and through
official
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 government department. The primary reason
about
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people
wanting
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 to know the history of their homes is that
human
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humans
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 are generally curious
in
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 nature. It is in their genes to know the truth and facts about their surroundings, and that gives them inner satisfaction and peace.
Moreover
, media programs nowadays exploit
this
 nature of us for monetary gain and viewership.
This
 has now increased the interest of
people
 manifold.
For instance
,
one
 of the most famous
program
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 that runs by
Discovery
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the Discovery
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 channel is called Home Origins, in which a team of experts and the host do their research about a place, and tell its origin to the owner of the property. The most feasible way to find the history of
one
's property is to do research on the internet about hiring an expert in
this
 field or to find out about
concerned
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 state
authority
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authorities
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. Nowadays, because of the increasing interest of
people
, many
people
 are available who have experience in
this
 field.
One
 can find them on the net, and they will do the whole work for you for a certain amount of fee.
In addition
 to that,
city
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the city
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 council usually keep the data of every building and structure in the
record
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 area of
"Building
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the "Building
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 and Development Authority" department, and the same record is
also
 available online in many countries. In conclusion, media portrayal of
history
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the history
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 of
house
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the house
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 we live in as an important thing and our curious nature as human beings are the main reasons for
this
, and by searching relevant information online,
one
 can easily find the answers he or she is looking for.
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