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Writing Samples
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You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look verysimilar to each other. You don’t fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter say which points in the articles you agree with, explain ways in which your town centres is different from most other town centres, and offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article.

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Dear Sir/Madam Editor of NYC Newspaper, My Name is
Stefanni
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Stefani
 Mauren, and I am writing to you
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 your articles in the NYC newspaper discussing the similarities among
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centres
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 across our country Indonesia. I appreciate the points you raised,
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however
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 I must respectfully disagree with the notion that all
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centres
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 are alike. I agree that most
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centres
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 share common features,
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 shopping malls,
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 chains, which can create a sense of uniformity.
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, I believe that each
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 has its unique character and charm that sets it apart.
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: Bali presents its culture reflected in its architecture
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 and the beauty of natural scenery. Unlike many other
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centres
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, we find
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 skyscrapers
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 cultural respect. In my hometown Kupang, the
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 centre is distinct from other
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centres
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 in East Indonesia. Our
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 centre is located near Timor Leste, which has historical ties to Indonesia.
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, our
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 is home to several independent traditional weaving craftsmen who create unique patterns and fabrics, reflecting the diverse heritage of over 25 tribes
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all over East Nusa Tenggara.
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, I would like to invite you to visit Kupang and experience its unique culture for yourself and I would be more than happy to give you a guided tour of our
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 centre. Thank you for considering my perspective. I look forward to the possibility of welcoming you to Kupang. Regards,
Stefanni
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Stefani
 Mauren

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down your points more clearly into separate paragraphs to enhance readability and structure.
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Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and clear to enhance communication of your ideas.
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Your letter has a polite and respectful tone, which is very appropriate for a letter to the editor.
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You provided specific examples that illustrate your point about unique features of your town, which strengthens your argument.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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