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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
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The Chart shows us the percentage of pleasure between two groups of single and married individuals.
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 it has
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 been measured and observed that having a
child
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 has an effect on couples in the U.S.
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According to the
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 first chart, it shows us that four different year groups are happier than the singles at the same
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, which shows us that being committed
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 someone can make you feel more positive emotions and could potentially have an effect on you. The enjoyment level among marital status
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 varied between 40 and 45
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percent
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. Younger
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 groups like 18-29 years tend to be more happy and satisfied
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then
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than
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people
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 from 50-64 years of
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,
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 another thing that caught my eye is that older
people
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 have the same level of happiness and satisfaction in life as
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people
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 that are 30-49 years old which
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 would have never thought. Married couples with children under the
age
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 of 18 are happier than the other two categories, which have only an 18-year-old
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 or no
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 at all.
People
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 with a youth under the
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 of 18 take first place with 44
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, followed by those who do not have a
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 with 43
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percent
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, and bonus 41 belongs to the
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 group of couples with an 18-year-old and only a
child
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 with 41
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percent
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.
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, the data shows that married
people
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 have a higher quality of life than unmarried
people
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, regardless of whether or not they have children.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words child, age, percent, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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