The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
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are showing statistics about the
happiness
of
couples
in
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different ages. They are comparing married and unmarried
couples
and if they have
children
or not.
According to
the information from the graph, married
couples
in all
age
groups are
more happy
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than unmarried
couples
. The biggest difference between married and unmarried
couples
when it comes to
happiness
is in the
age
group 18-29. Unmarried
couples
only have a
happiness
rating of 21
percent
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on average, in comparison to that married
couples
in
this
age
group
have
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a feeling of
happiness
from
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about 45
percent
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.
According to
the graph,
couples
who are married are the happiest in the
age
stage of 18-29.
Couples
who are not married are the
most happy
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with 34
percent
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,
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when they are 65 or older. The stage where married
couples
feel the
most happy
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is when their
children
are under 18. When married
couples
have
children
who are already older than 18 they don’t feel that happy. In comparison to married
couples
with no
children
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they even feel less happy than them.
Overall
, the chart presents a lot of information about the
happiness
of
couples
in different life situations and you can take out from the graphics that married
couples
with
children
or not are
more happy
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than unmarried
couples
no matter which
age
group.
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