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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
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The given
chats
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charts
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 are showing statistics about the
happiness
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 of
couples
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in
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of
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 different ages. They are comparing married and unmarried
couples
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 and if they have
children
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 or not.
According to
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 the information from the graph, married
couples
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 in all
age
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 groups are
more happy
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happier
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 than unmarried
couples
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. The biggest difference between married and unmarried
couples
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 when it comes to
happiness
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 is in the
age
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 group 18-29. Unmarried
couples
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 only have a
happiness
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 rating of 21
percent
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 on average, in comparison to that married
couples
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 in
this
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age
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 group
have
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who have
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 a feeling of
happiness
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from
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of
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 about 45
percent
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per cent
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.
According to
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 the graph,
couples
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 who are married are the happiest in the
age
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 stage of 18-29.
Couples
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 who are not married are the
most happy
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happiest
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 with 34
percent
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per cent
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,
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 when they are 65 or older. The stage where married
couples
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 feel the
most happy
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happiest
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 is when their
children
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 are under 18. When married
couples
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 have
children
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 who are already older than 18 they don’t feel that happy. In comparison to married
couples
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 with no
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children
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,children
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 they even feel less happy than them.
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, the chart presents a lot of information about the
happiness
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 of
couples
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 in different life situations and you can take out from the graphics that married
couples
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 with
children
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 or not are
more happy
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happier
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 than unmarried
couples
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 no matter which
age
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 group.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words happiness, couples, children, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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