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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no denying the fact that min purpose of exchange international
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 is arguable. The question is what the advantages and disadvantages ,what will be the impact on
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 process. While it held belief, the international sedent exchange would be beneficial for secondary school, they think when the
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 must be sharing them education background so
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 will get more experience about other countries.
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 like, so that will improve the score of each group and support the education process. As what happened in United Arab Emerita when the government applied
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 and improve Significantly. On
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, there are many
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 the cost, which actually
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 a big amount of money to can to in high quality, anther thing which many people
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 about is the
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 between cultures , that maybe lead to problems especially in
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 level of acceptable the others and can
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 as happened in some countries in tourist season, In my opinion, there is positive and negative side for exchange students, but can control the disadvantage if there are some rules
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 the students respect each other and understand the
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 the teachers should give them
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 a brief about the other , how they can dealing with these communities and what is not allowed to do in these. When applied
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 way the students will get the benefits from that and achieve the program goals.
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