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It is often said that governments spend too much money on wild life protection, while others say that there are other problems that are more important discuss both sides and give your opinion

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 some folks believe that big
resources
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such
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 as
time
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 and
money
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 should be devoted to
protect
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animals
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 in wildlife,
others
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thinks
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 it is preferable to direct these
resources
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 to
human
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the human
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population
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. In my opinion, even though protecting wild
animals
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 is substantial,
human
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the human
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population
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 should be a priority.
This
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 essay will discuss both views and will
also
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 give a logical conclusion. On the one hand, preserving wild
animals
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 is crucial. Because wild
animals
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 are playing an important role in balancing the environment,
so
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it is completely understandable why some people think that they should be taken care of.
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, wild
animals
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 contribute to the sustainability of the food chain. Which is directly linked to humans. For
this
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 reason, some folks support the idea that we should take care of wild
animals
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 and put
big
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a big
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 effort to protect them.
On the other hand
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,
others
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 believe that taking care of human
being
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beings
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 and spending
money
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 and
time
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 on them is more substantial. Because
human
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the human
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population
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 cannot help
preserving
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preserve
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 wildlife if they themselves are lacking
resources
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. So human problems should be solved
first
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then
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 wild
animals
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 problem should come
next
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.
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, poor
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population
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populations
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 around the world are less likely to protect wild
animals
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.
That is
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 why
others
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 do not support spending large
resources
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 on wild
animals
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. In conclusion, wild
animals
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 protection is becoming a concern among certain demographic societies so much that they think that more
time
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 and
money
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 should be spent on it, while
others
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 are more concerned about
human
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the human
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population
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 and think that it is more important to devote
resources
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 to them.
This
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 article discussed both views and argued why spending
money
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 and
time
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 on
human
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the human
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population
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 is more important.
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