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Some people believe that teenager should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can be benefit teenagers and the community as well . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The question of what teenagers should do in their free
time
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 is still under discussion. A certain part of society panders over that it will be helpful if youngsters did unpaid public
work
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 at that period. Though it could be reasonable in some circumstances I believe that youth should have a choice how to spend their spare
time
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. On the one hand,
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 working at a young age has some advantages.
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, it helps to become a more responsible, disciplined, conscious person.
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, voluntary
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 is useful for the community. In some areas,
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 as cleaning the streets some additional help will never be useless.
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, teenagers have already done their
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 studying in school. It is a challenging period and everyone deserve to have a rest. When I was
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 age I did my best at school, tried very hard. Maybe even more than when I started to
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.
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, maybe the right decision will be to give them an alternative. Parents or teachers could explain to teens the benefit of public
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 is. It could be really quality
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 with their mates and they could get new skills. And after that youngsters make their own decision. If I was told in my high school that it is possible to do, I would definitely take
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 opportunity. In conclusion,
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 there is the objective advantage requiring teens to
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 for the community without paying, I suppose that we need to give them a choice and decide by themselves how to spend their free
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