It is important that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, in the whole ,
world
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people
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are trying to avoid discrimination. From
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children
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are mixed together from different types of families and
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,
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from different religions and abilities. On one hand, I believe it's a good point the
children
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can grow together like will happen in real life. I ,
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,
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was growing up with the mixed category of
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at my nursery, school and even university and I am pretty sure that I will choose for my kids to go to similar mixed groups of the school.
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, I had met a lot of good personalities, from different
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, I had developed the understanding that we are different in
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world
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, and I was ready for
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real life, where you must
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contact
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different categories of
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for different other reasons than study.
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, I had the ability to not judge them, just because they are not like me.
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, I think the way the parents want to grow the baby, it's just
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choice.
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, if they decide to grow them separately from different
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it's nothing about
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not
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. In my opinion, even at ,
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you can teach your
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about how to understand the
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were
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where
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are living in different categories of
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. To sum up, it's very important to develop and to give the right view about the real
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to the
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. Because when they will grow up, they need to be ready to contact with all
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people
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and to not judge them just because they are different from each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promotes Inclusivity
  • Fosters Equality
  • Appreciate Diversity
  • Equitable Society
  • Broad Perspective
  • Problem-solving Skills
  • Real-World Diversity
  • Navigate
  • Global Society
  • Strive for Improvement
  • Unique Talents
  • Healthy Competitive Spirit
  • Reduce Social Inequality
  • Access to Resources
  • Empathy
  • Social Skills
  • Communication
  • Teamwork
  • Conflict Resolution
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