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Some people believe that spending money on developing technology on space exploration is not justified while others think that there are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some groups of people have belief refer to investigation on
space
 exploration is not justified while some others believe that there are more important ways to spend money in.It is clear that both of them are correct and we are going to survey each one respectively. At ,
first
 when
space
 science becomes evolved it leads to solving various earth problems.So investigating
space
 research become so important nowadays and all countries especially the USA works on it.
For instance
, one of the major benefits that are a result of
space
 thriving is ,
scientists
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 figure out some ways that global warming will have solved by the end of 2025,
furthermore
, some special tools find out we can live on the moon too, in other ,words we are able to send people to the moon in order to continue their
life
.
On the other hand
 , despite
space
 being so important, others
aspects
 are vital to spend money on.Our
life
 has lots of
aspects
 that the priorities are in the same level
such
 as health, food consuming, clothes, entertainments and so on.If most of the funds investigate
space
 exploration we are going to lack other
aspects
 and ,
definitely
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 we are going to face various obstacles, for ,examples we can not define because of
space
 importance, the money has not been spent on other conditions
such
 as public health because social health is important as well as
space
 research for all the society and result of both of them can improve the
life
 quality. In conclusion, we must pay attention to all the
aspects
 of social
life
 due to the importance of all of them, in ,addition the lack of each one leads to lots of problems that show up in people daily routine.
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  • space exploration
  • justified expenditure
  • technological advances
  • earthly concerns
  • telecommunications
  • environmental conservation
  • inspire innovation
  • diplomatic relationships
  • peaceful cooperation
  • long-term survival
  • colonization
  • commercial ventures
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