Your are stayig at your friend’s house who is travelling to another country. A recent strom damaged the house. Write a letter to your friend and say What happened and when What was damaged in the house What needs to be done about it

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Dear Ara, How are you? I hope you're safe and enjoying your stay in Paris. I don't want to spoil your holiday but I need to inform you about the condition of your house after the incident that happened yesterday. I was watching the news two days ago and they announced that a big storm

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come. I thought of checking all the surroundings in your place to know if anything needs to be repaired prior to the coming typhoon. Everything was in perfect condition until yesterday, the rain poured heavily and

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continuously

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winds

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unstoppable as well. In the morning I noticed that the backyard gate was severely damaged and the plants got distorted, but I'm still hoping I can save some of them. I need your advice if you want me to hire someone to fix everything .

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, let me know your plan of action and I'm willing to give the best help that I can. I'm really sorry for what happened but everything is under control. See you soon and I hope

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news doesn't spoil your vacation in Paris. Take care, Jane

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task response

Ensure that all paragraphs are well-developed and fully elaborate on the points mentioned. Consider providing more specific details about the damaged areas and how they might be fixed.

coherence and cohesion

Try to maintain a logical flow between paragraphs for enhanced readability. Using transitional phrases could further improve the coherence of your letter.

writing tone

Your opening and closing are warm and considerate, setting a respectful tone throughout the letter.

logical structure

You structured the letter logically, with clear paragraphs dedicated to describing what happened, detailing the damage, and suggesting next steps.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

187 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

severe weather conditions
structural integrity
mitigate
immediate steps
insurance claim
repair estimates
temporary fixes
contractors
coordination
overseeing repairs
valuables
reassurance

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