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Some people believe that studying history is very important and we must study the past to understand the present. Others say that it is useless and should not be studied at all. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is argued by few that
history
 is a crucial subject to study that helps to manage the current situation and for others, it is merely a waste of time. In
this
 essay, we are going to discuss both the view and give an opinion.
To begin
 with,
History
 is the only
way
 to study the pattern and to relate the current trends, which would be used to predict the consequences.
History
 is the basis for the authorities to make decisions to avoid conflicts and destructive events.
For example
, UNO is formed to maintain peace and
history
 helps the authority to maintain peace by understanding the errors of the past that paid the
way
 for WW1 and WW2.
However
,
History
 has no relevance to the fast-growing
world
. Today we have grown
further
 in technology and modernizing our life that changed the
way
 that was
practiced
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practised
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 by our ancestors. Following the old false beliefs and practices will not suit the present civilization.
For instance
, practices like killing a woman herself if her husband dies have no good impact in
this
 modern
world
 and pay no
way
 for growth. To conclude, studying
history
 is a waste of time for the
fast growing
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world
 where people think out of the box and innovate new ideas to make
this
world
 a better place to live.
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