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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Sharing
information
 is increasingly important in many nations. According to some
people
 sharing knowledge in scientific research findings, the business and education sector is the best thing to do, but the rest of the
people
 believe research finding in the science experiment should be limit incorporate and scholarly. In
this
 essay, both viewpoints are discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. Some individuals argue that the benefit of knowledge sharing speed up the new findings in the science and technology world due to removing the financial barrier in finding the
information
. As a
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result scientists can do various research at a low cost to find solutions to dangerous diseases like covid, HIV. But
this
 is not exact in all cases. The main point of the group who strongly believe in not sharing
information
 freely is, they believe it is very dangerous when
information
 goes to a wrong hand of a
people
 or group,
such
 as found in military science. Because, if
this
information
 goes to
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 wrong hand, the result is very dangerous.
Secondly
, they pointing that they want an advantage in their effort and investments. In
this
 ,
case
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 that
information
 is not available publicly. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that all
information
 should be accessible as much as possible. It seems to me that
people
 should be aware to underestimate the value and power of knowledge
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