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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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A rising case of professionals,
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, doctors and educators, are migrating to other industrial countries from their native land.
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 situation creates some problems
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 as, decreasing the level of professional
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, harming the interests of the state. These issues can be tackled by taking relevant measures. Running low on professional
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 impacts badly on local
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 as the majority of
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 can not find a knowledgeable doctor, who can recover the sick
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 suffering from the illnesses, and these
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 must choose the professional doctor and they go to a foreign country. From my point of view, if there are professional doctors, scholars, teachers they not should go to another country which
people
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 can pin down their issues easily.
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 situation is equal for all professional
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affect
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 which
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 grow up as an idiot by so there are is no professional teacher, scholar.
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 local
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 going to other countries for study, for medicinal reasons which
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 country and they take money which running low money
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government
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. Stem from
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 should pin down
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 issue for its healthy future.
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 should extend
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wage
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 of professional
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. In my point of view
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 case they don’t
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 to abroad. In
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 problem is significant for
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the government
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.These issues can be tackled by taking relevant measures.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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