IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

University should accept the equal number of male and female students in each subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement.

#university #students
Universities should go with
gender
 equality in admitting
students
 in each and every subject, which means an equal number of men and women in every subject,I am not fully convinced with the idea and going to elaborate
further
 in the
next
 paragraphs. universities are for
further
 education and their
admission
 process should be unbiased,
,
Change the punctuation
apply
show examples
If they start dividing the seats on the basis of
gender
then
 in some
subjects
 there will be waiting for getting
admission
 and on other hand, some
subjects
 where male dominance the 50% seats may remain vacant or useless.
In other words
, due to
this
 actual number of
students
 getting
admission
 will be less leaving a few seats without
students
 and eligible
students
 will remain on the waiting list due to their
gender
. University education should be given freedom of selection of
subjects
 according to
students
 preferences and interests rather than bonding it with the sex of the
students
.There is always dominance of male and female
students
 for particular
subjects
 like females prefer more in arts and related
subjects
 ,while males go with science and technologies as their favourite. If there will be a number of restrictions
then
 some
students
 need to compromise with their subject selection and there will be a loss of actual candidates who can do better due to their natural inclination to the
subjects
. In conclusion, granting
admission
 by seeing
students
 sex will be harmful to future generations,giving rise to discomfort between
students
,
furthermore
Add a comma
,furthermore
show examples
 it will spoil the atmosphere of learning, as there will be more unsatisfied
students
 regarding their
subjects
 of study and just going for it because they do not have chance to select their favourite
subjects
 due to
gender
.
Submitted by mahesh029 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: