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We can get knowledge from news, but some people think we can't trust the journalist. Discuss, what do you think are the important qualities that a journalist should have ?

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There is a lot of information that we can get in the
news
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, especially now we have easy access to it. For some, they decided not to give belief in journalists. In
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 essay, I will tackle the reasons and qualifications of a good correspondent.
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 with, everywhere and at any moment, we can have knowledge of what's happening in the world now because of social media. Gaining a ton of information about what our society looks like and what we need to know is just one click away through browsing the internet.
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, because of
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, sometimes the
news
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 can be misleading and give false information to everyone.
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, one week ago, there was
news
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 about opening jobs in Canada, stating that they need thousands of foreign workers to join the medical field. Yet the
news
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 didn't give full details about how and when the applicants can submit their resumes.
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 to that,
other journalist
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another journalist
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 will write
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 about it and give guidance which is not right for the candidate.
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,
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, people don't trust some correspondents because of
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 kind of incident. I believe being a good journalist, the first skills they should have are honesty and having a good sense of dignity in their workplace. So that they can have sympathy and assurance.
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, being greedy for money is one of the reasons why journalists create fake articles to gain people's trust.
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, I believe there are still
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 honest correspondents doing their job with loyalty, honesty, and a great sense of articles to deliver to everyone.
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The introduction establishes a clear context for the discussion and outlines what the essay will address.
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Provides a clear opinion on the qualities required for a good journalist, contributing to a thoughtful discussion.
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Chooses relevant themes, such as honesty and integrity, which are effectively linked to the role of journalists in modern media.

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