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The diagram illustrates how Americans between the ages of 25 and 75 used their
salaries
 in buying necessities in 2013. Overall, in 2013 there was more income as compared to expenditures. With the
highest earning
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 approximately 80 000 ranging from the ages 35 to 54.
Contrary
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, 25 and
75 year
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75-year
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 old earns the lowest salary of 30 000 and just above 30 000 respectively. 25-34 and 65-74 age groups, had
salaries
 more than 50 000 with about 58 000 and 54 000
seperately
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separately
. Both ages had similar spending which is more than 40 000.
However
, those with 35 to 64 years had more
salaries
. People between 45-54 years got the highest
salaries
 of the three with almost 79000, followed by 35-44 aged with 1000 less and
finally
 those between the age 55- 64 received 2000 less than those aged 35-44 . The same trend continues to expenditures as the 45-54 old spend 60 000 which is 2000 more than the 35-44 and about 4000 higher than the 55-64 age group.

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  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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