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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solutions to solve the problem?

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“
Work
-life balance” has become more popular these days, especially since the COVID-19 Pandemic outbreak which forces us to
work
 from home with flexible working
hours
.
This
 causes people don’t have
time
 to live the other part of their lives anymore.
This
 essay believes the main
problems
 associated with the failure of achievements in
this
 balance is that
work
 sometimes takes too much
time
 and the misunderstanding between the employer and the employee, and
this
 essay suggests
time
 management to improve the efficiency of
work
 as the most suitable solution.   The principal
problems
 with the
work
-life balance are the amount of
time
 people spend on
work
 which leads to mental health
problems
. Flexible working
hours
 during
work
 from home build no boundaries between working and non-working
hours
, followed by the technology that has allowed us to do that.
For example
, smartphones allow people to send emails, make phone calls, and use productivity applications when eating breakfast, doing exercise, or watching TV.
This
 situation eats away a person’s private life and can make them suffer from excessive stress and some forms of depression in a long term.   The solution to these worrying
problems
 is the volition to do
time
 management both by the employer and the employee. The employer should have clear regulations about working
hours
 and what sanction will a person get if he breaks the rules, while the employee should have boundaries and do
work
 efficiently so that
work
 will not take up much
time
.   In conclusion, the
problems
 associated with
this
 poor
work
-life balance are apparently because of the current situation and the best solution is to find ways to maximize efficiency.
This
 can be done by creating a
time
 management system that works the best for the person’s situation.
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