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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solutions to solve the problem?

#people #balance #work #part #lives
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People
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 used to limit themselves to only
work
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 9-5 but nowadays the boundary between
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 and
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 is a grey area, with some taking their
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 home or vice versa
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 as bringing your kids and nursing them at
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.
People
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 said that it is hard to balance the two but the real question is: should it be balanced anyway? The
first
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 thing that comes to mind when we're talking about
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-
life
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 balance is should we even try to find a balance?
People
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 on average are spending >50% of their
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 at
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. By integrating
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 and
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, we acknowledged that they influence each other and should not be separated as a different thing. You can still contact your families at
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 and answer
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 calls at appropriate time after office hours, the key is to compromise.
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, some
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 set their standards too high. They want to have the most brilliant career, excelling to be a C-level executives within no time while at the same time
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 wanting to get everything
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 has to offer: marrying before turning 30, having a stable family with kids, and so many other
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.
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,
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 does not
work
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 out that way as we need to prioritise. Same as how we are choosing our KPIs at
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,
life
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goals
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 should
also
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 be considered on the equation. By adopting a concept of
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-
life
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 integration and consciously prioritising which career and
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goals
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 we want to pursue, we will be able to find harmony between
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 and
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. It is best not to choose one but to be able to integrate your
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 and choose the things that are for now and things that are for the future you.
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