Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solutions to solve the problem?

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People
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concerned nowadays are mostly about their happiness and
work
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-life
balance
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. The main problem
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for most
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is that they can not feel happiness and an amazing career at the same
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. It is like they have to choose between those two, while
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to be like that. They are still struggling to
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their private life and
work
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life. The primary issues are while
people
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get too busy with their
work
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, it takes too much
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of their lives to the point they don’t have
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to worry about other things
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as their mental health. They spent all of their
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for
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working. And I think
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the best way to solve the problem and achieve
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work
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-life
balance
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is to
work
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more efficiently. What is efficient means? It means that you have to
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smarter, not harder. The smarter you
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, the more efficient it will be. You have to find the perfect methods to do your job
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so that it doesn’t consume too much of your
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. You can go home early, or at least on
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if you
work
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efficiently.
For example
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, I have been an intern for
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media division at some
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. And I tend to do my job earlier and faster so that I can have a longer rest for myself.
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, I have more
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to spend the rest of the day with my family and friends.
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the way I keep my mental health stable. Not spending too much
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for
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work
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, but I did all of my tasks perfectly. In conclusion, the issues
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work
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-life
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that
people
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sometimes find
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hard to solve is to maximize
efficiency
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the efficiency
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of
work
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. Find the best methods for yourself and change your daily habits little by little,
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you will be able to find more happiness and the
balance
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of your private and
work
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life.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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