Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Many
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that one of the most successful activities to persuade the population to purchase items is advertising.
However
,some people claim that
this
operation is definitely common and nowadays they are ignored. From my point of view ,I believe we
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ignore the power of advertising.
Firstly
,in my opinion ,one of the most conspicuous things to persuade people
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different commodities is advertisements.
For example
,most of the big brand names and famous companies around the world ,do not have a dealership in some areas ,especially,
developing
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countries. There is no denying that the population who live in these areas can purchase their products by watching their adverts on the internet or commercial channels on TV. It would seem that in these regions big company's products are the most popular
such
as Appel in Iran.
Therefore
,
this
makes it clear why the impact of advertising on human beings is staggering.
By contrast
,others believe that advertisement and showing an advert is becoming eroded among the population in the world.
For instance
,in
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century thanks to education and people's knowledge ,adverts do not play a significant role in their choices. These humans say we all know what is the most suitable item for us.
This
could maximize the influence of advertising.
This
also
would create a space to consider another method to sell products.
As a result
,it becomes apparent there is a permanent reason behind each claim via societies. To summarise ,I personally believe human beings notice adverts and they habitually believe them because of the noticeable power of
this
trend. It is predictable that to increase
this
model of purchasing items advertising will become the biggest trade in the near future.
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task response
Work on developing a stronger thesis statement to clearly present your own opinion on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas are logically connected throughout the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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