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It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?

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An announcement was made a short while ago regarding potential plans to build a cinema
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 in my suburb. In my opinion,
this
 could be a great opportunity to showcase what our suburb has to offer. Even though
this
 could lead to plausible concerns about human and road traffic, a cinema could
also
 improve the financial and social situation of residents. While sometimes understated, the child-friendly facilities, restaurants and parks in
this
 area are overlooked and could benefit from a larger audience. On top of the standard playgrounds available, childcare centres are strewn across the area and cater to busy families.
Although
 some could argue that we have the same food stores that are offered in other suburbs, we have unconventional ones too, like a cafe supplying common books and a cafe with a dog-friendly courtyard selling high tea.
On the other hand
, attracting non-locals could ironically reduce the accessibility of the district and its amenities. Another movie complex generates more options when choosing movies and entices visitors from other neighbourhoods. In like manner, more people would be exploring the district and adding to the congestion among the streets, in stores and on the roads.
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 and social situation of residents, regions
Nevertheless
, erecting a movie place would benefit local business owners and add to the livelihood in the region. In regards to the proposed cinema, I agree that it should be built here as it could benefit locals by displaying what is known for.
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