Sports events such as the Formula One and other car racing events should be banned because they are an unnecessary waste of money and create more pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Sports
events
,
such
as F1 are incredibly popular around the globe and are followed by a
lot
of people and enthusiasts.
However
, it is
belived
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believed
that F1generates a
lot
of waste of
money
and creates pollution for what should be banned. In front of
this
statement and as an F1 enthusiast, I completely disagree with the argument
by
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following
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reasons.
First
and foremost, major
events
as
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F1 are considered a huge income for countries and cities where
this
event is celebrated. Formula one has a huge number of fans and enthusiasts that follows the race wherever it is celebrated, so, the
money
spent by
the
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these followers in
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different
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differents
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different
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countries,
for example
, in
sectora
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sectors
sector
such
as hospitality, indirectly boost the
countrys
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country's
economy and
also
reputation. Following with arguments in favour of F1, many car brands
such
as Mercedes, Mclaren and Ferrari, invest a
lot
of
money
in
development
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of free emission cars. So, saying that, many F1 brands are already aware of
envirnmental
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environmental
pollution problems and as a solution
have
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incorporated
eco-friendly
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company vision to reduce
this emissions
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. It is
also
worth noticing to consider, that major
events
generate a
lot
of drink and food waste that should be treated with more responsibility by governing body and perhaps consider to give the left-over food to homeless shelters or
organisation
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that help disadvantaged people. In conclusion, nowadays sports
events
such
as f1
brings
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a
lot
of
money
to the country and the city, it is an amusement event which brings a
lot
of joy and emotions to the people. And
also
, it already cares about the planet by constructing new free of emissions cars which are
environmentaly
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environmentally
friendly. For all that reasons,
F1
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event
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should not be banned.
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