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In many countries, more money is spent on transport system in the cities. In contrast, very little is spent in rural areas.What are the effect of this and What can be done to solve this problem.

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The transportation
system
 in the rural areas is neglected in terms of their development when compared with the urban
transport
system
.
This
 affects the economy in the countryside.
However
, there is a myriad of solutions
such
 as enhancing digitalization in the
villages
.
This
 essay will elaborate on the same in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the most prominent effect of poor
transport
 in the
villages
 is economic setbacks.
In other words
, the damaged roads are responsible for insufficient
transport
 of goods to a village.
Moreover
, the problem in transportation hampers the start-up businesses in the countryside.
For instance
, my cousin Karan winded up his grocery shop in his hometown 'Mohali' because of insufficient availability of goods due to
transport
 failure. Every problem has solutions. Here the issue of failure in business in the rural areas because of a bad
transport
system
 could be addressed by improving digitalization in the
villages
. Through digital marketing, the people in the
villages
 could select the most upgraded product on their bucket list and when the digital shop receives more
such
 orders from that area the shipment can be done once a month.
This
 will be not only beneficial for the villagers but
also
 for the shop owner. To exemplify, in my district Nashik, the surrounding rural areas are attached to a digital market
system
. The villagers are incredibly happy with
this
 development. The authorities are
also
 satisfied by solving the problem of those villagers. In conclusion, the business-related financial issue is the most bothering effect of the failed
transport
system
. Digitalization is one of the best solutions in
this
 matter.
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